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Hi i am Sara Mebius I live in Cincinnati Ohio and I love my school and we have so much fun here.

One day Sara was at the park then a space ship came on top of me(her). She screamed really loud mommy! Then the door opened and the aliens came out and said come with us to the universe. She didn't know what to do so she said I(Sara) will go for a whole day, that's it. Okay, we will have a blast. So we went in the ship and,10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1,blast off! When we got there we had pizza at the alien table. Now you need to see the king. Is he mean she asked? Only when you disobey him. Is he natrally (naturally) mean she asked? No but he can be. He gives you a reward if you don't disobey him. Let's go Sara okay. Aliens what did you bring me? We brought you a person from earth. What is your name child? My name is Sara Alien king. Very cute name. Thank you Alien king. Your welcome Sara. Do you love the pizza and the pizza table? Yes Alien king I(Sara) love(d) the pizza and the pizza table. Well thank you very much Sara. Oh you're very welcome Alien king. Since you don't disobey me you can have a special treat. Okay Alien king. What should it be my dear child? How about some more pizza! Aliens get more pizza for Sara. Okay master. Thank you Aliens. Your welcome Alien king. So Sara would you like to live on this planet? I want to, but my parents have to know. So I will decide about that Alien king. Okay that is perfectly fine Sara, I(Sara) always let guests think for a(A) while so it's fine. Thanks Alien king and I think I decided if I want to stay here. Okay child what did you decide? I decided I want to sleep here for two days then I will want to go home. That's fine Sara as long as you stay here for more than one day it's fine. So better start getting ready for bed Sara okay Alien king. I'm going to brush my teeth Alien king okay Sara. I'm very tired so I'm(Sara was) going to sleep. Okay Sara. The next day I(Sara) woke up I(Sara) was in a space ship. She screamed where am(is Sara) I! Your in the ship my dear. Oh your going home today. Why? Because there are bad guys coming to are planet. So were taking you home so your safe from bad Aliens there are badder then you think. So that's why we're taking you home. Here we go! 10,9,8,7,6,5,4,3,2,1, blast off! We landed in the park safely. Hurry my parents are coming! Were going back blast off! Hi mom hi dad hi Sara. Let's go home and have pizza. The End

I will really like if you will add more details,and you should add commas  because that will help the story get better! From Neema