GEDS-Lauren

Dear Pen Pals, My name is Lauren and I'm a girl. I'm in 3rd grade. My favorite toys are my "Littlest Pet Shop" Toys. I like to draw and ride my bike. My favorite food is chicken. At the end of my street there is a creek that I like to go down to. My favorite books are Matilda and Diary of a Wimpy Kid. One thing that is cool about living in Maryland is that it is close to Washington D.C. The capital of Maryland is Annapolis. Maryland also has the Baltimore Aquarium, too. What is your favorite animal? How many brothers and sisters do you have? Have you ever been to the Petronas Towers? Your Friend, Lauren

Tell the aliens a good story from earth or face annihilation!!

Brainstorm: >my idea: a funny story: >>Eat breakfast and notice your dog is sitting at the table and screaming "Oh alright!!!" over and over >>Go outside and see your cat is trying to fight the next door neighbor's super-powered cat and scream "It won't do any good."at your cat but you say "Fishy fish" for some reason. >>You go to your friends house and they have turned into chihuahuas and your friend says "I don't know why we look like chihuahuas! Arf Arf! Grrr! At least now we have an excuse for annoying your neighbor's cat!" >>Then you suddenly are on a purple mountain and wherever you go cats run in circles around you. >>You decide to go home and ask your mom for lunch and she has turned into a green cyclops. She serves you a green peanut butter and jelly sandwich. >>Then you scream "WHY DOES EVERYONE LOOK LIKE AN ANIMAL!!!" >>Then a huge star makes you jump on it, and then it starts flying to a city that is made of money. >>You realize it's time for dinner. You think you want pancakes and a mountain of pancakes appears in front you. >>You start to eat one and your skin turns gre- >>and then your mom starts to shake you awake and you say Wow what a dream
 * Lauren:

Rough Draft:

Ok, 3 years ago, aliens wanted to destroy the world. I told them this story: I had a really weird dream last night. I woke up (in the dream) and when I got off the bed, I stepped on my brother's Lego castle. When he built it it was in his room, not mine. Next I heard someone yelling "Oh alright!!!" over and over. I went downstairs to the kitchen table and it turned out my dog, Puff, who was sitting at the table like a human, was the culprit*. I went outside for a walk and noticed that my cat, Oxford, was attacking the neighbor's super-powered cat, who they didn't have in the real world. I tried to scream "It won't do any good, Oxford!" but for some reason I said "Fishy fish!" instead. I went to my friend's house so I could see his new video game. His house turned into a haunted house and he and his family looked like chihuahuas. He said "I don't know why we look like chihuahuas but now we have an excuse for annoying that Icecat!" then I was teleported to a purple mountain and no matter where I went, green cats went in circles around me. I asked my mom for lunch and i noticed she turned into a green cyclops. I screamed "Why does everyone look like an animal or creature?!?". And suddenly, a huge star came out of the ground and started moving! It took me to a city made of money, and then, I got hungry for dinner (I thought it was weird how I got hungry in a dream.). I wanted pancakes for dinner... but my "mom" probably wouldn't be O.K. with that. But out of nowhere, a mountain of pancakes appeared in front of me! I started to eat one an my skin turned gre-... and then I realized I was dreaming because my mom was shaking me awake. She screamed "LAUREN!! You slept until lunchtime on a school day!!! have you been hypnotized by aliens?!?" and I said "Mom! Aliens aren't even real!!" and just as I said that, I heard a huge crash! the aliens' s ship had landed! And I went outside and told the aliens this story. After I told them the story, the were about to fire the Super-Laser built into the ship, and that laser could destroy the world. But the weird super-powered cat and dog from my dream some how became real, and started exploring the ship, and the alien screamed "STUPID EARTH CREATURES!!! Stop messing with our plans!" and the animals seem to be meowing and barking to each other. The dog focused on the weaker aliens,while the cat focused on the strongest alien and the ship. After 10 minutes, the aliens screamed "OH ALRIGHT!!! We get the point. We'll stop destroying the world if you tell where we can get more weird creatures like the one with pointy ears and the one with a shorter tail!" The aliens did not know Earth had millions of cats and dogs, and they did not even know what to call them! My neighbor, Thomas, who was no longer a chihuahua, said "There are a million cats and dogs on Earth, but there is only a 2 in 6 billion chance of finding a super powered one!" and then one of the lower ranked aliens said "let's go home." but the head alien said "YOU DUMMY! Our ship is broken! I guess we'll just have to stay here..." THE END!!!!

Second draft:

Ok, 3 years ago, aliens wanted to destroy the world. I told them this story: I had a really weird dream last night. I woke up (in the dream) and when I got off the bed, I stepped on my brother's Lego castle. When he built it it was in his room, not mine. Next I heard someone yelling "Oh alright!!!" over and over. I went downstairs to the kitchen table and it turned out my dog, Puff, who was sitting at the table like a human, was the culprit*. Now Puff is a white Pomeranian. He acts very childish and he never seems to get angry. When my parents got him, he was all curled up in a ball, he looked like, you know, a puff of fur. I went outside for a walk and noticed that my cat, Oxford, was attacking the neighbor's super-powered cat, who they didn't have in the real world. Oxford is a gray cat with yellow eyes. He has a horrible personality. I tried to scream "It won't do any good, Oxford!" but for some reason I said "Fishy fish!" instead. I went to my friend's house so I could see his new video game. His house turned into a haunted house and he and his family looked like brown, long haired chihuahuas. He said "I don't know why we look like chihuahuas but now we have an excuse for annoying that Icecat!" then I was teleported to a purple mountain and no matter where I went, green cats went in circles around me. The cats said in a really weird voice "we Fa, Fe, Fi, Fo, and Fu. we help you destroy big-head blue guy by giving badge. We know we have bad grammar, but we cats! and we not super-powered! No laugh!" The cats were an eerie green, and they also glowed. They were mostly the color of glow-in-the-dark stuff they had purple stripes, their eyes were yellow. The badge was silver with a thunderbolt on it. I seemed to know it from somewhere. I asked my mom for lunch and i noticed she turned into a green cyclops. I screamed "Why does everyone look like an animal or creature?!?". And suddenly, a huge star came out of the ground and started moving! It took me to a city made of money, and then, I got hungry for dinner (I think it's weird how I got hungry in a dream.). I wanted pancakes for dinner... but my "mom" probably wouldn't be O.K. with that. But out of nowhere, a mountain of pancakes appeared in front of me! I started to eat one an my skin turned gre-... and then I realized I was dreaming because my mom was shaking me awake. She screamed "LAUREN!! You slept until lunchtime on a school day!!! have you been hypnotized by aliens?!?" and I said "Mom! Aliens aren't even real!!" and just as I said that, I heard a huge crash! the aliens' s ship had landed! The ship was silver and had many laser beam firing cannons. And I went outside and told the aliens this story. After I told them the story, the were about to fire the Super-Laser built into the ship, and that laser could destroy the world. But the weird super-powered cat and dog from my dream some how became real, and started exploring the ship, and the alien screamed "STUPID EARTH CREATURES!!! Stop messing with our plans!" and the animals seem to be meowing and barking to each other. The dog focused on the weaker aliens,while the cat focused on the strongest alien and the ship. After 10 minutes, the aliens screamed "OH ALRIGHT!!! We get the point". I thought it was very strange how I when was dreaming Puff said "Oh alright!", and now in real life, the alien said "Oh alright!". "We'll stop destroying the world if you tell where we can get more weird creatures like the one with pointy ears and the one with a shorter tail!" The aliens did not know Earth had millions of cats and dogs, and they did not even know what to call them! My neighbor, Thomas, who was no longer a chihuahua, said "There are a million cats and dogs on Earth, but there is only a 2 in 6 billion chance of finding a super powered one!" and then one of the lower ranked aliens said "let's go home." but the head alien said "YOU DUMMY! Our ship is broken! I guess we'll just have to stay here..." THE END!!!! ...or not..?


 * a culprit is the person who does something (usually used after someone figures out who did something). (I figured out she was the culprit of the missing toy when I saw her footprints.)

Third draft: (Mrs. Archer Edits)

Ok, 3 years ago, aliens wanted to destroy the world. I told them this story:

I had a really weird dream last night. I woke up (in the dream) and when I got off the bed, I stepped on my brother's Lego castle. When he built it, it was in his room, not mine. Next, I heard someone yelling, "Oh alright!!!" over and over. I went downstairs to the kitchen table and it turned out that my dog, Puff, who was sitting at the table like a human, was the culprit*. Now, Puff is a white Pomeranian. He acts very childish and he never seems to get angry. When my parents got him, he was all curled up in a ball. He looked like, you know, a puff of fur. I went outside for a walk and noticed that my cat, Oxford, was attacking the neighbor's super-powered cat, who they didn't have in the real world. Oxford is a gray cat with yellow eyes. He has a horrible personality. I tried to scream, "It won't do any good, Oxford!" but for some reason I said, "Fishy fish!" Instead. I went to my friend's house so I could see his new video game. His house turned into a haunted house and he and his family looked like brown, long-haired chihuahuas. He said, "I don't know why we look like chihuahuas but now we have an excuse for annoying that Icecat!" Then I was teleported to a purple mountain and no matter where I went, green cats went in circles around me. The cats said in a really weird voice, "we Fa, Fe, Fi, Fo, and Fu. We help you destroy big-head blue guy by giving badge. We know we have bad grammar, but we cats! And we not super-powered! No laugh!" The cats were an eerie green, and they also glowed. They were mostly the color of glow-in-the-dark stuff. They had purple stripes; their eyes were yellow. The badge was silver with a thunderbolt on it. I seemed to know it from somewhere. I asked my mom for lunch and I noticed tat she had turned into a green cyclops. I screamed, "Why does everyone look like an animal or creature?!?" Suddenly, a huge star came out of the ground and started moving! It took me to a city made of money, and then I got hungry for dinner. (I think it's weird how I got hungry in a dream.). I wanted pancakes for dinner... but my "mom" probably wouldn't be O.K. with that. But out of nowhere, a mountain of pancakes appeared in front of me! I started to eat one and my skin turned gre-... and then I realized I was dreaming because my mom was shaking me awake. She screamed, "LAUREN!! You slept until lunchtime on a school day!!! Have you been hypnotized by aliens?!?" I said, "Mom! Aliens aren't even real!!" Just as I said that, I heard a huge crash! The aliens' ship had landed! The ship was silver and had many laser beam firing cannons. I went outside and told the aliens this story. After I told them the story, the were about to fire the Super-Laser built into the ship - the laser that could destroy the world. But the weird, super-powered cat and dog from my dream somehow became real, and started exploring the ship. The alien screamed, "STUPID EARTH CREATURES!!! Stop messing with our plans!" The animals seemed to be meowing and barking to each other. The dog focused on the weaker aliens while the cat focused on the strongest alien and the ship. After 10 minutes, the aliens screamed, "OH ALRIGHT!!! We get the point". I thought it was very strange how I when was dreaming Puff said, "Oh, alright!", and now in real life, the alien said, "Oh, alright"! We'll stop destroying the world if you tell us where we can get more weird creatures like the one with pointy ears and the one with a shorter tail!" The aliens did not know that Earth had millions of cats and dogs, and they did not even know what to call them! My neighbor, Thomas, who was no longer a chihuahua, said, "There are a million cats and dogs on Earth, but there is only a 2 in 6 billion chance of finding a super-powered one!" Then one of the lower-ranked aliens said, "Let's go home." But the head alien said, "YOU DUMMY! Our ship is broken! I guess we'll just have to stay here..." THE END!!!! ...or not..?


 * a culprit is the person who does something (usually used after someone figures out who did something). For example: I figured out she was the culprit of the missing toy when I saw her footprints.

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