GEDS-Aran

Dear Pen Pals, Hello my name is Aran and I'm a boy.I'm very good at swimming.I'm 8 years old and if you're wondering I'm in third grade.My favorite sport is soccer and I'm good at video games too.You should come to Maryland because there are a lot of fun things to like swim in the hot blazing sun over the summer or have awesome snowball fights in the winter.Also I have a nice standard poodle named Baxter.Maryland is a good place to live in but where I live there are barely any kids in my neighborhood.And there's a dog that keeps on running in my backyard ugghh....... freaky.And that's pretty much all my info.

Your Pen Pal, Aran

=Tell the aliens a good story about earth or face Annhillation!!!=

=Brainstorm:= fiction and non-fiction funny story a funny dog a funny person you could invite them to play alien video games with you and see who wins and the winner decides the earth's fate[except you can cream the aliens] and if you're a girl you'll play a girl. and if you're a boy same way the girls go so you boys will play boy's. say the earth has many dogs and cats to save so why would they destroy the earth when awesome animals are on it why aliens why or you could say we won't cause any harm[not really if they do we'll all try to get in space suits and then fight them for it]

Rough Draft: One day a nice dog was walking down the street and then he see's a weird man and he was screaming "la ti da hair and spa makes you look good as new Cherilee that is so you!" and then... "hot wheels beat that!!!!!!!" and then "omg I love Hannah Montanna I might even be a rockstar!!!!!!!!!!"The dog say's "you need some singing lessons and you need dancing lessons too!"And then the dog walks away "that's one weird dog says the man."Then the dog says "what you say to me weird man?""nothing nothing at all!" says the weird man.Then the dog walks home and then he hears a weird noise and then he saw an alien and he looks like a booger and then he points a ray gun at the dog and say's don't move or else you'll become a sack of potatos or some hot chili or a fat chicken!!!!NO PLEASE DON"T TURN ME INTO A SACK OF POTATOS screams the dog.Ok I'll set it to hot chili says the alien" will I be able to eat myself because if I won't then I'll call the police yeah how do you like them.....then the alien zaps the dog into a chicken and then the dog screams no FAIR!!!!!!!! and then the dog gets the ray gun shoots him and makes him a sack of potatos and then they decide who ever wins a alien video game wins and the dog wins and the alien says Best 500 out of 1000 and the dog beats him at all those rounds and the alien leaves.But then the dog ears a shout of terror..... O.K. who ever's writing this stop making me do all these weird things says the dog. well Jeeeeeeeeeeessssssssssssseeeeee you don't have to get pushy about it.says the narrator.

Second Draft: One day a nice dog who's name was Spartan and he was a german shepherd who was black and a light brownish was walking down the street and then he see's a weird man and this man was wearing a tie that lit up with a skirt that had Hannah Montanna and he had spikey hair and he was carrying a hot wheels track and playing with it and he had purpleish grayish greenish and blueish eyes and he was screaming "la ti da hair and spa makes you look good as new Cherilee that is so you!" and then... "hot wheels beat that!!!!!!!" and then "omg I love Hannah Montanna I might even be a rockstar!!!!!!!!!!"The dog say's "you need some singing lessons and you need dancing lessons too!"And then the dog walks away "that's one weird dog says the man."Then the dog says "what you say to me weird man?""nothing nothing at all!" says the weird man.Then the dog walks home and then he hears a weird noise and then he saw an alien and he looks like a booger except his name was BOB and he is a blueish greenish color and he has glowing green eyes that really make him look like a booger and then he points a ray gun at the dog and say's don't move or else you'll become a sack of potatos or some hot chili or a fat chicken!!!!NO PLEASE DON"T TURN ME INTO A SACK OF POTATOS OR ANYTHING ELSE THAT YOU SAID screams the dog.Ok I'll set it to hot chili says the alien" will I be able to eat myself because if I won't then I'll call the police yeah how do you like them.....then the alien zaps the dog into a fat chicken and then the dog screams no FAIR!!!!!!!! and then the dog gets the ray gun shoots him and makes him a sack of potatos and then they decide who ever wins an alien video game wins and the dog wins and the alien says "Best 500 out of 1000" and the dog beats him at all those rounds and the alien leaves.But then the dog ears a shout of terror..... "O.K. who ever's writing this stop making me do all these weird things" demands the dog. "well Jeeeeeeeeeeessssssssssssseeeeee you don't have to get pushy about it."says the narrator.

Third Draft: (Mrs. Archer Edits)

One day, there was a nice dog who's name was Spartan. and he was a german shepherd who was black and a light brownish was walking down the street and then he see's a weird man. This man was wearing a tie that lit up with a skirt that had Hannah Montanna and he had spikey hair and he was carrying a hot wheels track and playing with it. He had purpleish grayish greenish and blueish eyes and he was screaming "la ti da hair and spa makes you look good as new Cherilee that is so you!" and then... "hot wheels beat that!!!!!!!" and then "omg I love Hannah Montanna I might even be a rockstar!!!!!!!!!!"The dog says "you need some singing lessons and you need dancing lessons too!"And then the dog walks away "that's one weird dog says the man."Then the dog says "what you say to me weird man?""nothing nothing at all!" says the weird man.Then the dog walks home and then he hears a weird noise and then he saw an alien and he looks like a booger except his name was BOB and he is a blueish greenish color and he has glowing green eyes that really make him look like a booger and then he points a ray gun at the dog and say's don't move or else you'll become a sack of potatos or some hot chili or a fat chicken!!!!NO PLEASE DON"T TURN ME INTO A SACK OF POTATOS OR ANYTHING ELSE THAT YOU SAID screams the dog.Ok I'll set it to hot chili says the alien" will I be able to eat myself because if I won't then I'll call the police yeah how do you like them.....then the alien zaps the dog into a fat chicken and then the dog screams no FAIR!!!!!!!! and then the dog gets the ray gun shoots him and makes him a sack of potatos and then they decide who ever wins an alien video game wins and the dog wins and the alien says "Best 500 out of 1000" and the dog beats him at all those rounds and the alien leaves.But then the dog hears a shout of terror..... "O.K. who ever's writing this stop making me do all these weird things" demands the dog. "well Jeeeeeeeeeeessssssssssssseeeeee you don't have to get pushy about it."says the narrator.