MR_JordanO

H**//ey, I'm jordan & I'm in the fifth grade. I'm eleven years old, I have two dogs, & an iguana. I also have a brother,a mom, and a dad. I play a lot of sports, like volleyball, softball,basketball and I'm a pro cheerleader.When I grow up I want to be a vet.// my favorite color is green!!!:)**

What Just Happend? Payton was walking home one lazy day of May. When she noticed that the wind started to pick up speed. It started to get foggy. Payton saw some slight shadows whisking in the wind and she turned in a flash. She nervously whimpered “helllloooo” she looked around and she saw no one so she turned back. Payton walked away astonished.

She ran in the door completely out of breath, and bellowed “I’m home.” She saw a note on the counter. //**“I’ll be home** **in an hour… mom.”**// “All right I guess I’m on my own.” She walked into the office to check her email, she logged on and a pop-up came up. The pop-up stated that her email was cancelled because there was a virus going around. She logged back off and then went into the living room, weirdly not amazed.

Payton figured that she would be forced to take a shower when her mom got home. She got in the shower. She was about done rinsing her hair when she heard a noise. “Mom…is is that you. Payton got out she didn’t see her mom so she went in her room.

She turned some music on and jumped on her bed. Payton was in the position where she was backwards and on her stomach reading. She was listening to a twilight soundtrack and reading Eclipse. When all a sudden she heard a knock on her window, it was massive man. He was her science teacher, “Do you have your science homework?” “Um I think so let me check.” Payton rushed to her book bag and looked around. “Yep why?” “Because it very important that you bring it tomorrow.” “All right I’ll bring it” “Okay I’ll see you tomorrow.” “Bye!”

The next day at school was a typical day. We blew up stuff; a quarter of the class didn’t have their homework, just a typical day. I did my homework and went to bed it was like five I was super tired though. I woke up early the next morning I felt weird not like myself. Mom was in the living room watching the news. I told her I didn’t fell well, she said to go lay back down for a while. I went in my room and played my Wii, and then I lay down. When I woke up I felt better, all a sudden I heard a freaky noise. I looked in my closet, realized their was a pull out on the ceiling of my closet. I went to bed but, I wasn’t about to sleep in my room. I went in the living room when I realized that my hands were purple, my legs were orange, and my face was green. “I-I’m a monster literally what do I do. I called massive man. “Hey massive man it’s Payton and, how do I put this I’m a monster. “I could see that it would be a big problem.” “Yeah it is” “I’ll be right over” “okay, bye.” Massive man and I experimented all night and we figured out a solution but it made my nose bigger. Then we figured out a solution for that then it made my face green again. We finally found a solution that made everything disappear. So I went to bed and hoped for the best in the morning!

I woke up and I was thrilled that I was only one color. I went to school and before I did anything I thanked massive man. I had a typical day at school and an awesome grade in science. “That’s all I wanted massive man.” “Your grade is what you deserve that’s why you got a big A.” I know and it’s all thanks to you massive man//.”//

//The end// Where was massive man when you called him? What did you mean at the part when you said "I did my homework than went to bed it was five". I liked the bit when you started to describe what you looked like when you were a monster. I think you should change the bit where you called massive man and said "example"I called massive man he was in the backyard he came running... .