ISB_Tosia

=My name is Tosia. I come from Poland. I am 10 years old. My favorite thing to do is read and draw. I go to a school called ISB. My favorite subject at school is Music. My favorite color is yellow. My favorite books are "Princess Academy" and "Harry Potter and the deathly hollows".My favorite sport is swimming.= =

This is my first draft:

Why destroy Thailand?

Dear Alien King, I don’t want you to destroy Thailand. Thailand has lots of interesting places to see. There are beaches, shopping malls, and a safari world. Some beaches in Thailand are: Koh Samed, Hua-Hin, and Krabi. Koh Samed has very beautiful beaches. Those beaches are splendid. You can swim in the warm ocean, or relax on the sandy beaches. Hua-Hin has lots of very nice hotels. Those hotels are fascinating. Most Hotels in Hua-Hin have swimming pools and restaurants full of delicious food. I am sure; your majesty could have a great time in Hua-Hin. Krabi has marvelous beaches and great hotels. On Krabi, You can go snorkeling or scuba diving, and see some magnificent coral reefs. You can also do water sports. Siam Paragon is a good shopping mall. There are good products to buy. There is also a fantastic ocean world, and some great restaurants. Some shopping malls have fun things like: cinemas, bowling places, or toyshops. The Siam Paragon could be a nice shopping mall, to see. The Safari World is a very interesting place to visit. I you go there, you can see lots of beautiful animals. The safari world could be a nice place to visit with your family or friends. Also, you can show the safari world to other aliens. Another good thing about the safari world is that you can explore the animal kingdom and learn about them. Now that I have told your majesty, about all the wonderful places to visit in Thailand, do you still want to destroy it?

This is my second draft: SECOND DRAFT: Why destroy Thailand?

Dear Alien King, I don’t want you to destroy Thailand. Thailand has lots of interesting places to see. There are beaches, shopping malls, and a fantastic safari world! If you don’t destroy Thailand, I’m sure you would be able to visit all those spectacular places. Some examples of beaches in Thailand are: Koh Samed, Hua-Hin, and Krabi. Koh Samed has very beautiful beaches. Those beaches are splendid. You can swim in the warm ocean, or relax on the sandy beaches. Hua-Hin has lots of extremely nice hotels. Those hotels are fascinating. Most Hotels in Hua-Hin have swimming pools or restaurants full of delicious food. I am sure your majesty could have a great time in Hua-Hin. Krabi has marvelous beaches and great hotels. On Krabi, you can go snorkeling or scuba diving, and see some magnificent coral reefs. You can also do water sports. Siam Paragon is a good shopping mall. There are good products you can buy. There is also a fantastic ocean world, and some great restaurants. Some shopping malls have fun things like: cinemas, bowling places, or toyshops. The Siam Paragon is a nice shopping mall, to drop by. The Safari World is a very interesting place to visit. If you go there, you can see lots of beautiful animals. The safari world could be a nice place to visit with your family or friends. Also, you can show the safari world to some other aliens. Another good thing about the safari world is that you can explore the animal kingdom and learn about those interesting creatures. Now that I have told your majesty, about all the tantalizing places to see in Thailand, do you still want to destroy this wonderful country?

This is my final Draft:

Why destroy Thailand?

Dear Alien King, I don’t want you to destroy Thailand. Thailand has lots of interesting places to see. There are beaches, shopping malls, and the fantastic safari world! If you don’t destroy Thailand, I’m sure you would be able to visit all those spectacular places. Some examples of beaches in Thailand are: Koh Samed, Hua-Hin, and Krabi. Koh Samed has very beautiful beaches. Those beaches are splendid. You can swim in the warm ocean, or relax on the sandy beaches. Hua-Hin has lots of extremely nice hotels. Those hotels are fascinating. Most Hotels in Hua-Hin have swimming pools or restaurants full of delicious food. I am sure your majesty could have a great time in Hua-Hin. Krabi has marvelous beaches and great hotels. On Krabi, you can go snorkeling or scuba diving, and see lots of magnificent coral reefs. You can also do water sports. Siam Paragon is a good shopping mall. There are good products you can buy. There is also a fantastic ocean world, and some great restaurants. Some shopping malls, have fun things like: cinemas, bowling places, or toyshops. The Siam Paragon is a nice shopping mall, to drop by. The Safari World is a very interesting place to visit. If you go there, you can see lots of beautiful animals. The safari world could be a nice place to visit with your family or friends. Also, you can show the safari world to some other aliens. Another good thing about the safari world is that you can explore the animal kingdom and learn about those interesting creatures. Now that I have told your majesty, about all the tantalizing places to see in Thailand, do you still want to destroy this wonderful country?